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12 June 2007 @ 10:15 pm
 
I just posted these in justwrite . I wrote these a while ago during lunch hour and they are most likely full of mistakes and may or may not make any sense. I thought I would share these poems since I have never really written anything before and I thought they were a good try for a first time writer.


Hapiness

Happiness floating in the air just close enough to touch

Always their but just out of our grasp

Feelings of hurt and misery the catalyst that keeps us searching

Searching for the happiness that keeps us warm at night

Searching for the warmth of family

Searching for the love that brings us to our knees, that entwines our heart and soul so much so that all we can do is surrender to it.


Pain

Pain and misery in the world ensnares us

The kind of pain that weakens our very being

The kind of pain that shuts out all other feelings

That would otherwise ground us

In the bleakness of the day we cannot see the sun shining through

 

If only those who are surrounded by doubts could

See through the fog and embrace the sun

Embrace the water gently flowing around us

Embrace the wind wiping through our hair

Embrace the fire surrounding us, warming us to our very core

Embrace the earth crumbling beneath us

Only when we embrace the pain can we see the beauty

 

Only when we embrace each other as equals can we hear ourselves

Forget our doubts, fears and prejudices

Love like there is no tomorrow

Love each other’s differences and learn from them

Only when we love each other whole heartedly will each of us find salvation.

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Wormholes only go one way: kate_01timeillusion on June 13th, 2007 07:03 pm (UTC)
VERY beautiful! I love how your Pain poem starts off about pain and misery, but then is actually a call for hope and beauty. Well done!
jennifer jensen: SGA: Sheppardjenniferjensen on June 14th, 2007 03:43 am (UTC)
Thanks so much for the lovely comment. I'm going to give credit to my muse because I have no idea where that idea came from, it just kind of popped in my head. Seriously though, that is my favorite poem and I really liked how it turned out.
jennetje on June 16th, 2007 09:02 pm (UTC)
Beautiful. I love the Pain poem. Those words were just the words I needed to see/hear right now.
jennifer jensen: SPN: Jensenjenniferjensen on June 17th, 2007 02:38 am (UTC)
I'm honored to hear that my words spoke to someone other than myself. I was in a not so great place at the time and I needed to hear those words too, even if I had to say them.
Samantha: LizGrinsgangel on September 10th, 2008 02:47 am (UTC)
Wow! That's fantastic! Congratulations!! XD
jennifer jensen: SGA: Elizabeth croppedjenniferjensen on September 10th, 2008 02:53 am (UTC)
Thank you :D
renisanz: shepsmilerenisanz on September 10th, 2008 05:00 am (UTC)
Congratulations. :)

Embrace the fire surrounding us, warming us to our very core

Embrace the earth crumbling beneath us

Only when we embrace the pain can we see the beauty


I really liked the contrast you set up in these lines. It reminds us of how people don't embrace the beauty in the world until it's in danger (or endangered).
jennifer jensen: SGA: Joe required readingjenniferjensen on September 11th, 2008 12:25 am (UTC)
Thank you, I appreciate the positive feedback!
Shazeda: geekgormarien on September 10th, 2008 05:28 pm (UTC)
Congratulations !!!!
Hey you. It's been a while since i posted a comment, sorry !
Ah i like your poem.
jennifer jensen: SGA: Ronan No More Runningjenniferjensen on September 11th, 2008 12:23 am (UTC)
It has been awhile and thank you!